Monday, December 6, 2010

Query letter #3 for feature


December 1, 2010

Toni Coleman
Diverse: Issues in Higher Education
10520 Warwick Avenue, Suite B-8
Fairfax, VA 22030

Dear Mr. Coleman,

Due to the current condition of tuition increases for State Universities, students are going through more hardships than ever, but still place a value on attaining a degree and continuing their student careers.

I have noticed that Diverse magazine includes stories on the access and opportunities for all students, and I think this story will serve as a very motivational and informative piece amidst the deteriorating state of the higher education system.

My 980-word article will include personal anecdotes of Sacramento State students, which really brings the story down to the readers, but also statistics and hard, dry facts that is important to any member of the education system.

I am a college student studying journalism, and have had experience in writing columns on a broad range of subjects.  My position in the center of the higher education system allows me to gain an insight, and gather observations of other faculty and students.

I can turn a manuscript around as soon as you may need it.  I included some clippings of my prior works.

I appreciate your time and look forward to working with you in the future.

Best regards,


Alexandra Slavas
1600 Response Road
Sacramento, CA 95815
(209) 481-3869
alexslavas@yahoo.com


Query letter #2 for feature


December 1, 2010

Joe Agron
American School & University Magazine
jargon@asumag.com

Dear Mr. Agron,

Due to the current condition of tuition increases for State Universities, students are going through more hardships than ever, but still place a value on attaining a degree and continuing their student careers.

I have noticed that American School & University magazine includes stories of all types to help the business decisions of all school administrators, and I think this story will serve as a very motivational and informative piece amidst the deteriorating state of the higher education system.

My 980-word article will include personal anecdotes of Sacramento State students, which really brings the story down to life, but also statistics and hard, dry facts that is important to any member of the education system.

I am a college student studying journalism, and have had experience in writing columns on a broad range of subjects.  My position in the center of the higher education system allows me to gain an insight, and gather observations of other faculty and students.

I can turn a manuscript around as soon as you may need it.  I included some clippings of my prior works.

I appreciate your time and look forward to working with you in the future.

Best regards,


Alexandra Slavas
1600 Response Road
Sacramento, CA 95815
(209) 481-3869
alexslavas@yahoo.com



Query letter #1 for feature


December 1, 2010

Amanda Nachman
College Magazine
anachman@collegemagazine.com

Dear Ms. Nachman,

Due to the current condition of tuition increases for State Universities, students are going through more hardships than ever, but still place a value on attaining a degree and continuing their student careers.

I have noticed that College magazine includes stories rooted in the student community and I think this story will serve as a very motivational and informative piece amidst the deteriorating state of the higher education system.

My 980-word article will include personal anecdotes of Sacramento State students, which really brings the story down to its readers, but also statistics and hard, dry facts that is important to any member of the education system.

I am a college student studying journalism, and have had experience in writing columns on a broad range of subjects.  My position in the center of the higher education system allows me to gain an insight, and gather observations of other faculty and students.

I can turn a manuscript around as soon as you may need it.  I included some clippings of my prior works.

I appreciate your time and look forward to working with you in the future.

Best regards,


Alexandra Slavas
1600 Response Road
Sacramento, CA 95815
(209) 481-3869
alexslavas@yahoo.com




Feature story-Students continue lesson plans despite tuition increase

Overpriced college textbooks, diminished range of classes, pricey parking permits, and unit caps are all issues students at California State University Sacramento deal with from one semester to the next.  As if these limitations are not enough of a burden on students, The California State University Board of Trustees agreed to impose an overall 15 percent tuition raise over the course of the 2011/2012 academic year.

Students have trudged this far through the murky education system, but will this increase be the last straw that pushes students to their breaking point?

Surprisingly, the answer is no. 

Sami Nielson, a senior at CSU Sacramento majoring in psychology, thinks the fee increases are getting out of hand. 

“I have two loans out along with my parents who have one. I have to not only pay back my loans when I am done with school, but I have to pay back my parents as well. I'm going to be about $40,000 in debt by the time I graduate, if I even get to graduate on time,” Nielson says. 
After being asked if she once considered dropping out of school due to these fee hikes, Nielson replied, “I have considered dropping out because of the prices, but I've already paid so much and am so close that if I dropped out none of it would have been worth it.”

Ashley Tieken, another student at Sac State, echoes the same idea.

“The tuition increase is really tough on my parents because my sister and I both go to Sac State, so it's really double the increase for them because we're both full time students and unemployed.  I'm lucky because I only have one semester left, but my sister is only a freshman so will be subjected to further increases in the future,” says Tieken. 

Tieken mentions that the increase inconveniences students in more ways than one.

“It's ridiculous because we are paying more and getting less. Classes are so full that many people end up sitting on the floor for weeks, or you're wait-listed and don't get into the class and many people who are enrolled end up dropping anyway.  Where is our extra money even going?” Tieken asks. 

It seems this question resonates with all students.  The school board’s answer is this: “The new tuition rate will help the CSU sustain enrollment, classes and services for students,” according to Sacramento State’s News and Information web page.  Students’ frustrations stem from not seeing an immediate change, and the fact that perhaps they are the ones being financially punished now only to bring about change in the future—to only the next generation of students, not the current ones. 

Richard Hall, a Sac State senior majoring in Computer Science, says, “Our tuition has increased but our allotted units to register has decreased making it difficult to finish the necessary courses to stay on track to graduation.  This forces us to be enrolled longer, resulting in more money spent over time.  We are not paying just the 15 percent increase; we are paying that in addition to the extra time we are spending here.” Hall wants to know whether it is just current students suffering, or if this escalating trend will continue for generations to come.

In June, the Board approved a 5 percent tuition increase for the 2010/2011 school year “after the Assembly proposed to secure funds to buy out the other 5 percent increase assumed in the governor’s budget. The Assembly’s revenue proposal was dropped from the final budget, and the level of support from the state—while higher than last year—is still at approximately 2005-06 levels, and the system is serving more students now than it was then,” according to the CSUS News and Information site.  This brought the undergraduate semester tuition to $2,597.

On November 10th the Trustees approved a 5 percent increase for Spring 2011 along with a 10 percent increase effective for the 2011/2012 school year, according to Sac State President Alexander Gonzalez’s 2010 Fall Address.  The 5 percent increase effective next semester will leave an undergraduate student expected to pay $2,702 a semester.  President Gonzalez says that “our hope is that next year’s state budget will buy out the 2011-12 increase, and the CSU is making this request of the governor and Legislature.”

With decreasing reinforcement from the state, the CSU system is barely able to keep its head above water in the cascade of new student admissions each year.  If nothing changes, fee hikes will not end here.

Eric Valencia, a student at Sac State who is majoring in Kinesiology, says, “It’s been crazy trying to afford school.  I don’t get any grants; I have about three loans out right now.  If I don’t graduate on time due to the unit cap, my parents won’t be able to afford me living up here.  I only work one day a week at my job plus an unpaid internship; therefore, I can’t afford to make it on my own.  My dad, who is our sole source of income, had to resign from his job.  This tuition increase is ruining my chance at becoming the first one of my family to graduate,” says Valencia. 

It is important to mention that the CSU system is still one of the “lowest-costing public university systems in the country…[and] continues to reduce spending in response to state cuts through hiring freezes, furloughs and reductions in operating expenses,” as stated on CSUS’s News website.

These issues hit hard for all students in many different ways, but these hardships don’t come without a newfound strength to be persistent and hope that one day the hard work will pay off—speaking both in mental and financial terms. 

Wednesday, October 27, 2010

Query Letter Three for Profile

October 27, 2010

Gail Lew
Music Teachers' Association of California (State Office)
833 Market Street, Suite 900
San Francisco, CA 94103

Dear Ms. Lew,

Tom Renner, a music teacher in Tracy, CA, is a fascinating individual who will remind teachers of their truest objectives—preserving the defining traits of humanity through music.

I have noted that The California Music Teacher is narrowly tailored to musical teachers, but not all teachers share the same experiences or are driven by the same motivation. This is a way to engage your audience in a way that not only brings them to recognize what teaching is about, but to take one’s own teaching goals a step higher.

My 888-word article will propose a personality profile of Renner, including what qualifications he has as a teacher, as well as direct quotes from outside sources noting Renner's outstanding presence in the music community. Renner takes teaching to a new level, in which he emphasizes the idea of keeping it about the art, not about the fame of who's teaching it.

I am a college student studying journalism, and have had experience in writing columns on a broad range of subjects. I also have been playing piano for about 12 years, and have given lessons.

I can turn around a manuscript as soon as you may need it. I included some of my clippings of my prior works.

I appreciate your time and look forward to working with you in the future.

Best regards,


Alexandra Slavas
1600 Response Road
Sacramento, CA 95815
(209) 481-3869
alexslavas@yahoo.com

Query Letter Two for Profile

October 27, 2010

Michael Butera
The National Association for Music Education
1806 Robert Fulton Drive
Reston, VA 20191


Dear Mr. Butera,

Tom Renner, a music teacher in Tracy, CA, is a fascinating individual who will remind teachers of their truest objectives—preserving the defining traits of humanity through music.

I have noted that Music Educators Journal is narrowly tailored to musical teachers, but not all teachers share the same experiences or are driven by the same motivation. This is a way to engage your audience in a way that not only brings them to recognize what teaching is about, but to take one’s own teaching goals a step higher.

My 888-word article will propose a personality profile of Renner, including what qualifications he has as a teacher, as well as direct quotes from outside sources noting Renner's outstanding presence in the music community. Renner takes teaching to a new level, in which he emphasizes the idea of keeping it about the art, not about the fame of who's teaching it.

I am a college student studying journalism, and have had experience in writing columns on a broad range of subjects. I also have been playing piano for about 12 years, and have given lessons.

I can turn around a manuscript as soon as you may need it. I included some of my clippings of my prior works.

I appreciate your time and look forward to working with you in the future.

Best regards,


Alexandra Slavas
1600 Response Road
Sacramento, CA 95815
(209) 481-3869
alexslavas@yahoo.com

Query Letter One for Profile

October 27, 2010

Neil Cording
Rhinegold Publishing
239-241 Shaftesbury Avenue
London
WC2H 8TF
United Kingdom

Dear Mr. Cording,

Tom Renner, a music teacher in Tracy, CA, is a fascinating individual who will remind teachers of their truest objectives—preserving the defining traits of humanity through music.

I have noted that Music Teacher is narrowly tailored to musical teachers, but not all teachers share the same experiences or are driven by the same motivation. This is a way to engage your audience in a way that not only brings them to recognize what teaching is about, but to take one’s own teaching goals a step higher.

My 888-word article will propose a personality profile of Renner, including what qualifications he has as a teacher, as well as direct quotes from outside sources noting Renner's outstanding presence in the music community. Renner takes teaching to a new level, in which he emphasizes the idea of keeping it about the art, not about the fame of who's teaching it.

I am a college student studying journalism, and have had experience in writing columns on a broad range of subjects. I also have been playing piano for about 12 years, and have given lessons.

I can turn around a manuscript as soon as you may need it. I included some of my clippings of my prior works.

I appreciate your time and look forward to working with you in the future.

Best regards,


Alexandra Slavas
1600 Response Road
Sacramento, CA 95815
(209) 481-3869
alexslavas@yahoo.com

Feature Story Idea

While conversing with classmates, I arrived at a potential story idea for my feature.  I wanted to trace the path of music writings that I've done, so I decided to examine the prices of concert tickets, and find out why they are so expensive.  Professor mentioned one point for me to discuss would be finding the source of where this money goes.  Also, I wanted to interview a few people to find out if skyrocketing ticket prices really impact their need to be entertained.  Any other contributing ideas are welcome.  Thanks!

Personality Profile: Tom Renner, In the Business of Making Humans

J132/Magazine Writing Word Count: 888
How to Article
23 October 2010
Group #2
Tom Renner:
In the Business of Making Humans
By Alexandra Slavas
Imagine having the ability to connect with individuals on such a personal and emotional level. Envision getting closer to a student than any other teacher has gotten before, and through music, creating that connection that defines the epitome of humanity. Long hard weeks of practice aimed at perfecting sound from every angle. A standing ovation concludes this long arduous process. A standing ovation that symbolizes everything Tom Renner lives for. The gratifying feeling of seeing those proud faces overcome with emotion. This is what Tom Renner’s shoes feel like.
Instrumentals, composition, jazz, and large vocal ensembles are areas Renner has musical expertise in, just to name a few. As a Performing Arts Coordinator and music teacher for Tracy High School, Renner claims his experiences placed him into a position he was destined to be in, although there was never a moment he envisioned being a teacher.
“Teaching fell into place as the perfect solution,” Renner says. At 34 years old, his journey through life includes graduating at 19, where he realized his goals differed from the average college student. Renner expresses his dislike he had with school, but knows it was all he was ready for at the time. He then took a tangent into the military and couldn’t be more dignified.
“I am very proud to have been a cadet. This was the point at which I learned where my future was best to be played out,” says Renner. Living without a single regret, he decided to pursue his musical dreams selflessly.
“I learned I had a desire to interact with people at different levels. I viewed teaching as the product of the desire to want to work with people and a means to continue my professional life,” Renner says.
Arms embellished in tattoos, Renner insists that his tattoos be perceived in a literal sense as “body art.”
“I am putting meaningful art on my body…personal artistic messages that mark personal growth,” says Renner. A thick line traces one side of his body, from his shoulder to his ankle. Renner claims the meaning of this art to be a line in his life, to mark the turning point at which he trusted his self to gain ownership of experiences. Clearly, this is not your typical music teacher.
Having such a prominent role in leading other individuals into exploring the realms of musical knowledge and expression, Renner views his position quite differently.
“It’s not about me!” Renner exclaims, as he states the importance of keeping it more about the art, less about the fame.
“We’ve become lost in these smug concepts. We’ve missed the point. It is not about the ego, or about being in such a position of superiority. We need to keep it about the art. We have a salient purpose to communicate art.”
Pushing his selflessness to new boundaries, he says he would be fine if his name was left off a performance program entirely. He claims the connection to be the only thing that is meaningful.
“I’m teaching humans to be human,” says Renner. “I was gifted with a keen visceral awareness to how to respond to music. The process of being involved in music is so meaningful on an emotional level…I wanted to connect with that same thing in others,” he claims. Humanity is defined by its expressive and creative abilities. Renner lives to preserve this.
Mike Costa, another music teacher at Tracy High, says the most unique trait of Renner’s is his “ability to bridge the gap between students and professionals.” Costa says, “Renner has so many qualities, but one that stands out to me is his charisma. His magnetic personality is very rare.”
Renner describes his day as “12 hours of non-stop running.” His job puts him in a position that requires every minute to be tailored around catering to the unique needs of different students. Regardless of the activity, Renner places an emphasis on connection.
“We’ve become a family. They’re being taught a way of life,” Renner says.
In contrast with the other school curriculum, Renner states that students in music class are “emotionally motivated to be involved in the program.” He also compares this same sense of ownership and pride with that of a sports team. “These students invest themselves emotionally, and only want to do it if they emotionally driven to do so.”
Renner claims that the fact that music classes serve as a medium to connect with others, is what distinguishes it from other core curriculum.
“The lines are blurring a bit between the director, performer and audience. It’s not as defined as that between a math teacher and student…it’s very objective,” he states.
Renner also addresses the current issue of music programs amidst the budget crisis. When asked why school officials don’t view music in the same respect he does, Renner replies, “because it is not backed up with quantified scores. But this is what keeps us from become such a fixed, uniform society of robots. Music gives us a reason to use information, unlike computers, which just spew it back out.”
Clearly, our world needs more teachers like Tom Renner. He is, after all, in the business of keeping humanity alive.


How-to story revised-need new lede

J132/Magazine Writing Word Count: 571
How to Article
18 October 2010
Group #2
How to Learn Piano on a Budget
By Alexandra Slavas

Aspirations do not always have to end on a harsh note. Exploring cheap avenues to fulfilling your goals is the key to unearthing those dreams you have pushed aside for so long due to financial constraints. Matt Netto, a piano teacher at Tracy High School who also gives lessons at a local music store, offers some advice to those seeking inexpensive routes to learning piano.
“The cost of lessons depends upon the educational level of the teacher,” Netto says. On a monthly basis, prices may range from 15 dollars a lesson for a teacher with no degree, up to 100 dollars per lesson for a more experienced teacher.
Although, depending upon your personal goals as a piano learner, these options may sound like the answer if you prefer one-on-one training with a credible source. But for others, time and financial hindrances may leave us seeking other options.

So what else is out there?

As our technologically advanced era gives us an advantage in accessing myriad information, we are left with the responsibility of sifting through the mess with the hope of coming across some reliable and trustworthy material. Netto recommends YouTube when it comes to finding useful tutorials.

“YouTube can have both good and bad content. Sometimes it is just kids trying to explore their own learning and sharing it on video, but some real piano professionals have a lesson or two on there,” says Netto. He explains that combining the more reputable instructional videos on YouTube with an adult beginner book with good diagrams and explanation of technique, repertoire and music literacy will indeed allow you to tap in to the torrent of information out there and use it to advance your own goals and dreams.

So if you have gotten this far, you have probably have a means of accessing the means of learning piano, but have no place to solidify those skills. Whether you choose to rent or buy a piano, there are some facts you should know. Netto mentions that “when selecting a piano or keyboard, you must take into account age, condition, and maker. Baldwin, Kawai, Yahama, and Steinway are the best brands to explore. (That list is from cheapest to most expensive, and least to highest quality.)” Netto says buying used is usually the best option but prices and quality vary significantly. A used upright piano should cost about 700 to 1,500 dollars depending on the makers. New ones range from 3,000 to 4,000 dollars. Used Grand pianos and Baby Grand pianos usually start around 3,000 dollars and go as high as 30,000 depending on the maker. New Grands go as high as 60 to 70,000 dollars.

Netto also says, “You have to shop around. Music stores often do this, or have a dealer with whom they contract. Many piano dealers like to give their new pianos to music schools and private lesson facilities on a loan so that they can later sell them as “high quality” used. Do some research by checking out local music stores to see what they carry.”

Inexpensive approaches to learning piano are out there—all it takes is a little research to access them, and you will be on your way to realizing that your greatest goals in life are not always confined by your wallet!

Sunday, October 10, 2010

Personality Profile

While sifting through different ideas on who to focus on for my profile piece, I decided to follow a music teacher.  I am still having difficulty trying to narrow in on a unique aspect of this person-what defining trait makes him worth writing, or reading about.  Is merely being a music teacher enough? This is what I'm trying to figure out...any ideas?

Tuesday, October 5, 2010

Query Number Three


October 5, 2010

Mark Evans
Decibel Magazine
1032 Arch Street, 3rd Floor
Philadelphia, PA 19107

Dear Mr. Evans,

The current condition of the economy has led people to lose sight of their goals, knowing their financial incapability.  I would like to offer you a how-to story on how to teach yourself piano.

I have noted that Decibel Magazine is narrowly tailored to a musical audience, but not all readers may have musical knowledge.  This is a way to engage your audience in a way that not only gets them up-to-date on the most current news of the music world, but to take one’s own musical goals a step higher.

My 680-word article will propose a requirement list, so that way a reader can have everything ready and be fully focused on learning the piano.  I will include additional resources the reader can utilize, such as pictures and links to the rather helpful YouTube videos, and beginning books if the reader decides to take it that far.

I am a college student studying journalism, and have had experience in writing columns on a broad range of subjects.  I also have been playing piano for about 12 years, and have given lessons.

I can turn around a manuscript as soon as you may need it.  I included some of my clippings of my prior works.

I appreciate your time and look forward to working with you in the future.

Best regards,


Alexandra Slavas
1600 Response Road
Sacramento, CA 95815
(209) 481-3869
alexslavas@yahoo.com

Query Number Two


October 5, 2010

Phil Alexander
Mojo Magazine
Endeavour House, 189 Shaftesbury Avenue
London, WC2H 8JG

Dear Mr. Alexander,

The current condition of the economy has led people to lose sight of their goals, knowing their financial incapability.  I would like to offer you a how-to story on how to teach yourself piano.

I have noted that Mojo Magazine is narrowly tailored to a musical audience, but not all readers may have musical knowledge.  This is a way to engage your audience in a way that not only gets them up-to-date on the most current news of the music world, but to take one’s own musical goals a step higher.

My 680-word article will propose a requirement list, so that way a reader can have everything ready and be fully focused on learning the piano.  I will include additional resources the reader can utilize, such as pictures and links to the rather helpful YouTube videos, and beginning books if the reader decides to take it that far.

I am a college student studying journalism, and have had experience in writing columns on a broad range of subjects.  I also have been playing piano for about 12 years, and have given lessons.

I can turn around a manuscript as soon as you may need it.  I included some of my clippings of my prior works.

I appreciate your time and look forward to working with you in the future.

Best regards,


Alexandra Slavas
1600 Response Road
Sacramento, CA 95815
(209) 481-3869
alexslavas@yahoo.com


Query Number One


October 5, 2010

Mike Shea
Alternative Press
1305 W. 80th Street, Suite 2F
Cleveland, Ohio 44102-3045

Dear Mr. Shea

The current condition of the economy has led people to lose sight of their goals, knowing their financial incapability.  I would like to offer you a how-to story on how to teach yourself piano.

I have noted that Alternative Press is narrowly tailored to a musical audience, but not all readers may have musical knowledge.  This is a way to engage your audience in a way that not only gets them up-to-date on the most current news of the music world, but to take one’s own musical goals a step higher.

My 680-word article will propose a requirement list, so that way a reader can have everything ready and be fully focused on learning the piano.  I will include additional resources the reader can utilize, such as pictures and links to the rather helpful YouTube videos, and beginning books if the reader decides to take it that far.

I am a college student studying journalism, and have had experience in writing columns on a broad range of subjects.  I also have been playing piano for about 12 years, and have given lessons.

I can turn around a manuscript as soon as you may need it.  I included some of my clippings of my prior works.

I appreciate your time and look forward to working with you in the future.

Best regards,


Alexandra Slavas
1600 Response Road
Sacramento, CA 95815
(209) 481-3869
alexslavas@yahoo.com